Tuesday, March 17, 2009

New Pitch Party thread!

Due to length of the previous one. Check out rules below and get pitching! Thanks to our wonderful editors for making this the place to be today.



UPDATE: It's 7 pm, so the contest is now closed. THANK YOU to everyone who dropped by!!!!
Please come back at 9 pm where we'll post the editors' choices!!!
:-)

We'll keep the thread open for general discussion.

25 comments:

McKoala said...

My pitch...

Bastian can see kisses. They hover over children's heads on white wings that dust their skin with gold.

Except one. This kiss, given by an elderly aunt to Bastian's sister, Kira, at her christening, has black wings. While other kisses never touch, this unlucky kiss pulls Kira's hair into a tangle and picks her baby skin until it is scabbed.

And the kiss is just getting started. Only Bastian can save Kira – but how?

Sarah Garrigues said...

Word,

Thanks for your comment. I'm glad that you have recovered. Like I said in one of my earlier posts, I think all of us can learn from Henry.

~Sarah

Edittorrent said...

Did I break something? Damn. Always breaking things.

Theresa

Anonymous said...

A magic trick gone bad. Instead of turning his sister into a frog (a very worthy endeavor), Denny Blackburn has turned his best friend into a dog. Now, it's a race against time as the two boys—one real boy, one former one—try to solve the problem, as Gertrude McRump, the over zealous dog catcher, is hot on their trail...uh...tail.

Ruffing It (middle grade)

Lyncee said...

Edittorrent ~
Thanks!

They are breaking into the mob bosses office to get information to prove he is behind the death of Caitlyn - Sean's sister & Maggie's friend. They are working together because of their connection to Caitlyn. What is at stake - the revenge of Caitlyn's death which is now listed as accidental. That's the tie in with the title - sweet revenge.

Mandy Hubbard said...

Mckoala-- I dont see the connection between a kiss and these "things". A kiss can pull hair? I kind of scratched my head.

Guessing its a product of the 75 word count limit, and your normal pitch is more clear.

Lyncee said...

Evil Editor,

I'll definitely reword it so the revenge aspect comes into play right away. Alot to do in 75 words.

Again thanks for the input.

Anonymous said...

Hi there are now two Anonymous posters. I am PJ O'Brien, who clearly needs to set up a blog persona.
Anyway, Theresa, thank you so much for the comment. Fiona has to flee her ordered arrest by the king who fears her "wild" magic. She knows people who go into his dungeon do not come out.
I also wish to thank all the editors for their comments on the many pitches here. I have learned a great deal from reading this thread. Thank you Book Roast!

Embee said...

I'm hoping editors are going back and reading pitches from the first thread!

This has been a really fun day. It's awesome to feel all the creative energy flowing!

Murphy said...

Thank you Chris for hosting this! It was a blast. Learned a lot and met some very talented people.
You have to promise to do this again sometime.

Aileen said...

Yes, thanks for hosting this! It forced me to get a lot more focused on the conflict in my novel.

Anonymous said...

Donna Kennedy's pitch for DOLL HUNT, an adult novella:
Esse Livingston is putting her life back together, one doll at a time. Bad luck has dogged her from the age of eight when her parents died and she went to live with the evil old aunt who stole her "i-dolls." The next thirty years weren't much better, and now a dream foretells her death in eleven days. "Not without my dolls," she says, and so begins the search that changes her luck and her life.

moonrat said...

wow. are people still reading comments on the original feed, i wonder? i dont think i have anything intelligent to add after my fellow editors have so thoughtfully reacted to each pitch, but i have some visceral "oh this would be awesome for my list" or "god i'd switch to doing children's for this book!" kinds of silent thoughts about some.

Anonymous said...

Okay here goes...

After catching an epic wave and accidentally exposing her right “tah-tah” to the San Diego locals, GRACE Parker is relieved her best friend FORD thinks she’s “perky.”

Grace avoids a roller coaster home life by surfing, focusing on school, and hanging out with Ford. Her friendship with Ford blossoms into love, and he becomes her Spanish knight in rusted Chevy. Through his love, Grace makes a choice that will change her life.

~Lindsey
YA/Secrets

Shona Snowden said...

Speak out those silent thoughts, Moonrat!

Repitch your pitches if you are worried, but I think the editors will find their way here.

Richard in CA said...

Theresa,
How's this? Actually the book title is "liar." I confess, in the previous post I changed a couple of words for this complete MS to match the "luck" theme.

Can a fourteen-year-old farm boy and his new friends survive ninth grade when someone's using magic to get them expelled? This diverse group of friends must first learn to trust each other, overcoming their own prejudice before they can find out. Along the way, they discover their teachers might be in on the plot, and then problems multiply because his two closest friends are girls who don't trust each other, and perhaps want more than friendship.

Michelle said...

LA- My MC is definately a conflicted character, My readers have a love/hate thing going. One moment he is loving and kind, the next a cold blooded killer.

Edittorrent, (Theresa), Thanks for you comments.

When Antony is called, he refuses the call. Outside forces begin to work on him, and things begin to fall apart.

He finds his home is bugged and begins to doubt his employer. He kills an innocent man and begins to doubt his occupation. He is being followed by a man in black sunglasses, and getting shot at by another guy.

To top it off, his religious wife of ten years finally becomes pregnant and he now must add anther person, his unborn child, into the circle of people he must protect. All while trying to keep the corporation happy so he doesnt get himself his wife and baby killed.

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The Zoo Lady said...

Detective West doesn't see murder in the grisly scene at the zoo. Polar bear licking blood off her paws over here, disemboweled zookeeper over there. Bad mistake, yes; murder, no. But when the scene reveals no fingerprints, West realizes someone used the bear as a murder weapon. West soon finds lots of suspects ... lots of dangerous animals … and more victims.

Sarah Garrigues said...

I second Shona Snowden's thoughts...why not voice your silent comments, Moonrat?

moonrat said...

Shona--haha, I'm one of the editors. It just seems like everyone else has already taken a lot of time to have conversations about each pitch, and I've only read them!

AstonWest said...
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Noble M Standing said...
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Shona Snowden said...

No rush, Ms Moonie. We've got all night...

laughingwolf said...

rats, thought i'd forgotten something :(

i'll blame it on the surgery, though it had little to do with it...