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This is your opportunity to catch the attention of a group of most awesome editors! Please post your pitch in the comments section.
Recap of Da Rules:
1) Pitch limited to 75 words
2) One pitch per person
3) Pitch must somehow relate to today's theme - luck. (good luck, bad luck, no luck--whichever you choose)
4) Hours of operation: 7 am - 7 pm (New York time)
5) Pitch may be based on a real book, or may be used as a writing exercise. (Or, just for fun!)
Everyone is welcome to offer constructive feedback on the pitches throughout the day!
Each editor will select three pitches and say why those pitches appealed to them. The winning pitches will be posted at 9 pm.Special thanks to the following participating editors!!!
Editorial Anonymous
Edittorrent
Evil Editor
Moonrat
Ms. Spitfire
215 comments:
«Oldest ‹Older 201 – 215 of 215Theresa:
Hi Back!
Um, yeah a few things missing I suppose but when I sat and put my 206 word blurb on a diet, slimming it down to 75, some things had to go.
Had fun and learned a lot - that's what counts, right?
Edittorrent, your right it is a rom com. In my query I do offer more insight to Wyatt, it was difficult here with the dwindled word count.
Lyncee:
I'd move the revenge closer to the top so we have an idea what kind of plan we're dealing with. Something like changing the second sentence to:
A plan to get revenge on Mr. X for Y hits a major pot hole when...
Lyncee, I want to know their goal. Why are they breaking in to the mob boss's office? Why are they working together in the first place? What is at stake?
Pump up the specifics. Not a bad pitch -- in fact, it's very clean and clear -- but I want more detail.
Theresa
What if Jack of the beanstalk fame was the same guy with the notorious candlestick jump, not to mention great pals with his next door neighbor...Jill? And what if he was deathly afraid of heights and his mother climbed the beanstalk beanstalk and fell for a huge guy with a horrible stutter (fee fi fo...or something or other)? Jack and Jill to the rescue.
Further Adventures of Jack B. Nimble
Hi, PJ, and congratulations on your first pitch!
This is a solid premise-based pitch. Tell me why she's forced to flee the king's court, and that might be enough detail to get an editor to want the synopsis.
Theresa
Theresa: thanks for your feedback. Truth is, Mia is the character I am least clear about, and I guess that shows. (Rolls up sleeves.) Time to work.
As for my comment about writing a breezy story: it's really just a response to the fun ones I've read this morning. I realize serious books get published as well. I was secretly jealous (That's my green for today) of the timing and humor that seems so effortless in some of the pitches.
Thanks again for your comments, not just to my pitch, but to the others. I am learning!
Editor Anonymous:
Damn, maybe I should have gone with the word 'lust' instead!
And thanks Editorrent!
Angela Russell, this feels a bit like a plot to one of those old after-school specials. Remember those? A kid in crisis, a bit of adventure, and a strong moral to the story. It's a formula that works, but you don't want your pitch to feel like a formula. Focus on the character and what makes her unique. This could end up being very appealing.
Theresa
Bastian can see kisses. They hover over children's heads on white wings that dust their skin with gold.
Except one. This kiss, given by an elderly aunt to Bastian's sister, Kira, at her christening, has black wings. While other kisses never touch, this unlucky kiss pulls Kira's hair into a tangle and picks her baby skin until it is scabbed.
And the kiss is just getting started. Only Bastian can save Kira – but how?
Wow, big day! Might be time to open a new thread. In fact...
Cat, in the last half of the pitch, drum up some specifics. What words and verbal abuse? These form the conflict, so it might be a good idea to spell them out.
Otherwise, a solid pitch.
Theresa
Just to clarify - I've opened a new post above this one, because this was turning into a scrolling slug! Please post in the new thread now.
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